This was amazing! I know of the original prompt that the prompt for this story was based off of, and let me tell you the stories written for it were terribly dramatic and heart-breaking. This one, too, did not fail in bringing the angst. You created a good back-story for how Jim came to "cheat" on Spock. I also like that he was completely unaware of what actually happened to himself at first. It adds additional conflict.
As for the ending, I think it fit very well that Jim stayed with Spock. Though I must express that I didn't think Spock had enough of a reaction (or any at all really) when it was revealed that Jim had been raped. I had kinda hoped he would have a moment of horror and realize that he'd been wrong. The way I read this story, he just seemed to be like "Oh, that's unfortunate. Nothing to do with me." Maybe you don't feel like it came out that way, but I sorta did. Sorry if that doesn't sit right with you, but I figured it couldn't hurt to tell you my perception.
All in all, though, it was a good story. This prompt (and the one it was based of off) is one of my favorite ones on all of the kink_meme. I appreciate you writing this. Thanks!
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Date: 2009-12-05 09:57 am (UTC)As for the ending, I think it fit very well that Jim stayed with Spock. Though I must express that I didn't think Spock had enough of a reaction (or any at all really) when it was revealed that Jim had been raped. I had kinda hoped he would have a moment of horror and realize that he'd been wrong. The way I read this story, he just seemed to be like "Oh, that's unfortunate. Nothing to do with me." Maybe you don't feel like it came out that way, but I sorta did. Sorry if that doesn't sit right with you, but I figured it couldn't hurt to tell you my perception.
All in all, though, it was a good story. This prompt (and the one it was based of off) is one of my favorite ones on all of the kink_meme. I appreciate you writing this. Thanks!